Edexcel IGCSE: draft short writing task

I am trying to get my y11s to deliberately plan a short task for the short writing question.  Too many plan to write and simply write until the time runs out.  My idea is to consciously plan for no more than 4 paragraphs to try and help them, structure their work.

 

This powerpoint and draft is designed to help students understand an approach to the writing which should deliver results.

 

I wrote alongside them, and post my offering here:  marks out of 10?  I did my best….

possible short task  Simply my sample draft

 

possible-short-task-full-ppt     possible-short-task full ppt  The draft with discussion and explanation.